PEER REPLIE

In 100-150 words, respond to two peers’ main posts. Offer your thoughts on the effectiveness of your peer’s revised paragraph. Make a suggestion for possible further revision. Also comment on your peer’s approach to the revision process. Identify any considerations or strategies that your peer may not have identified initially.

Jacqueline Galan

My revision process begins with checking plagiarism, grammar, and then making sure my text is well organized and that all the sentences support the meaning I want them to give. I do feel related to Lamott’s writing when she mentions, “The only way I can get anything written at all is to write really, really shitty first drafts”. (Lamott 1994). When I try to do writing, I have noticed that sometimes I do it without the paragraphs making any sense, and after I am done, I take a second look and try to fix the mistakes and put them in the correct order. I find it more convenient, pretty much all the time I do my writings really wrong, but once I put things together, it gets to the point that I think, and I encourage myself to do a good wringing.

1.-Paragraph One The persuasive argument will be that dental cavities it’s a big issue in the world. It should be prevented at a shortage and one of the preventions should be dental sealants. The placement of sealants should be free and a mandate, to avoid many lesion developments in teeth.

2.-Paragraph One The persuasive argument will be that dental cavities it is a big issue in the world. It should be prevented at a shortage and one of the preventions should be dental sealants. The placement of sealants should be free and a mandate, to avoid many lesion developments in teeth.

The strategies for revising are; outlining the paragraphs that should be together and that helps on the delivery of the message in the writing. I am checking the supporting information. That can make my writing more credible.